ext_12114 ([identity profile] hesadevil.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] gen_storyteller 2007-02-19 12:45 pm (UTC)

An excellent piece. I like the way you've written Dawn's thoughts. they seem to flit randomly when, in fact, there's a logical progression towards the final sentence. I don't think Dawn comes out as younger than she should. She was originally planned as a younger child but the writers didn't adjust her character to the actress' age.

You've drawn Tara beautifully, too without having her speak even one line.

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