China drabble

[spuffyduds.livejournal.com]

TITLE: Crunch
Summary: A drabble set shortly post-Not Fade Away.
Rating:PG.
Warnings/Notes: Done for this week's "China/Chinese" prompt at open_on_sunday.

The slayers have spread out, walking a grid, checking every building, cleaning out what’s left of LA. And as Tori steps down into a basement, there’s a crunch under her boot. She looks down to see china shards, a glass eye; and something’s springing out of the shadows, screaming “You killed Miss Edith, you little bitch!”

The screaming woman knocks Tori back, out the door; and then there’s just a slow drift of ash in the air, on her clothes, in her mouth.

She dreams of it, often: a dry grey tickle in the throat, and a smashed glass eye.

Comments

[myfeetshowit.livejournal.com]

What a clever twist on the prompt. Poor Dru, though!

[spuffyduds.livejournal.com]

Oh, yes--nobody wants to see their children go before them! Thanks.

[scarlettlily.livejournal.com]

Very interesting!

[spuffyduds.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[ozma914.livejournal.com]

A fitting and not overly surprising end to Miss Edith's mistress ... but what struck me was that in that short space, I came to feel like I knew a lot about Tori! Great moment.

[spuffyduds.livejournal.com]

Well, cool! Always fun if I can accomplish an introduction in a drabble. Thanks!

[hesadevil.livejournal.com]

I like your use of the present tense. It pulls us into Tori's POV straight away. There's also a symmetry in the construction of the drabble, beginning and ending with the focus on that glass eye.

Nice work.

[spuffyduds.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I appreciate the thoughtful feedback... Doll eyes are just CREEPY.